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Minor wording changes to draft-metzger-ah-00.txt
Here are the few changes I would recommend. Most are related to
concerns of the english language.
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diff draft-metzger-ah-00.txt draft-metzger-ah-00.txt.ala.jpp
45,47c45,47
< This document describes an authentication mechanism for IPv4, by
< inserting an intervening header between the IPv4 Header and any
< transport headers.
---
> This document describes an authentication mechanism for IPv4 which
> inserts an intervening header between the IPv4 Header and the
> transport headers of the to be authenticated packet.
[english concerns]
277c277
< SAID values in the range 0xFFFFFFF1 through 0xFFFFFFFF are
---
> SAID values in the range 0x00000001 through 0x0000000F are
[better to keep special values together in a single block. 0x0 is
special also.]
293,294c293,294
< have such special processing instructions included in its
< specification.
---
> have such [what is refered to?] special processing instructions
> included in its specification.
[I don't know what "such" refers to here. I may just be slow.]
338a339,340
> [Overly specific, move this (good) discussion to the document describing
> the digest algorithm....
353c355
<
---
> ...]
[This stuff is specific to the authentication alg. and should be moved there.]
367a370,371
> and the authentication algorith does not specify how to handle non-
> integral length messages,
[I doubt that there will be any authentication functions which don't
specify. In any case, when they do there shouldn't be two
specifications ofwhat to do.]